the map doesnt look so bad. i went ahead and downloaded it to my server. though, maybe next time you can make a two extra files for download(im using my last map as an example):
zp_darkslay.txt with some words in it or something, maybe info or how long it took u to make it or so.
zp_darkslay.res file (just open up a txt file and save it as .res) and put this in it:
this is do that when a person conencts to a server playing this map. this file will tell the player to automatically download the txt file and res file. else, unless im wrong, you will only download the bsp map and view the txt file on the server side, without actually downloading. (btw: in case im worng, someone told me this, so sorry lol)
and then save it in a zip file.
other then that, from the screen shots, it doesnt look so bad, ill be sure to try it out. good job