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Yokai
07-21-2005, 07:30 AM
"hm, so you say he was murdered but you dont know exactly who did it huh?" said the first detective, on the phone to a young woman. Her husband was killed, throat cutting. They had just married one another, seems almost like bad luck. The other detective, shooting darts at the board looking comfortable as if he had just woken up from a nightmare. He says he was out late last night working. The first detective named George picked up his coat and walked to the dore clumsily, almost knocking over the pot hanging on the table. He picks up his coat and asks he parnter to stop messing around.

"hm, just while i was having some fun eh?" said the detective, who's name is david, laying on the couch. he threw the last dart, with a dead on bullseye. He picked up his coat from the couch he was shooting the darts from.

When they got into the small condo where he had been murdered, they saw the young woman, so upset she looked as pale as if she had died herself.

"The poor girl," said Goerge "David, take a look around for evidence while i talk to her about what she knows."

David walked into the the murder scene, dead body and all. From the wormth of the body, he could tell what time he was murdered. It was slightly warm, meaning the murder could have only been about 15 minuites ago. The strange thing about the body was the markings on his neck. They looked almost jagged, almost as if they were some stitchings on his neck. He had finaly found out whe happened when he found bloodly dental floss in the top shelf in the womans closet. He was ready, and knew she was guilty of murder.

"Hm, seems that we will have to let you go for now untill tomarrow. we'll keep in touch." said Goerge, almost positive that she wasnt guilty of anything.

"no, we will end this now, i dont feel like coming in tomarrow. You are guilty of murder and i have the evidence. First thing i noticed was the scare on his neck, very missed shaped and very un even." David stated while moving closer to the young woman. "Definatly not from a knife, and i found some dental floss wire in your closet."

"surely your kidding, nobody could cut someones throat with dental floss, its too weak and it would break." Goerge muttered in a almost bitter tone.

"The warmth of the body, he was killed about 15 minuites ago, which means there is still some evidence laying around because there is no way they could have put it somewhere in the time between the call we got and the time he was killed. Young lady, do you always hold your bag so tight?" Her eyes opened wide, with frieght in her face. "Or is it because there is something in there, that you just dont want us to see. I susspect it little peices of metal, along with liquid poisin. right?" A long silence went through the air. "shall i explain how i found out about the poisin? around the neck has a bit of purple tint, as in something poisonis had entered through the cut, using the bits of metal, you cut a whole through each peice, stuck the wire through and the rest is pretty simple."

"Let us see in the ba---" Goerge was saying untill she interupted.
"He blackmailed me, he wanted a devorce already and said if i didnt let him claim the room he would kill me. so --"
"Natuarly you made your move first" said David "You killed him before he killed you"

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The next day, with the case been solved, it seemed just one of those days the unexpecting happens.

The phone in the office rings once, then just stops. Then, 5 minuites later, it rings again. Goerge answers feircly yelling into the phone "hello, what may the problem be?" David, yet again shooting darts into the board.

"She was found what? in prison?" again a pause of silence while Goerge is eagirly listening to the story over the phone. David stops throwing the darts.

Goerge hangs up the phone, with his patience used up. Grabs his coat and mutters "an eaten corpse? seems almost fantasy eh? common, lets go." David shoots his last shot, missing the bullseye completely.


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To be continued and edited with some better grammer, its 8:30 am here and i havent gone to sleep yet... night!

LOgan
07-22-2005, 01:42 AM
B)

Yokai
07-22-2005, 02:25 AM
I know, its been like a day but hell i got nothing better to do:

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The prison was one of the highest gaurded facilities in the state, surprising how she could have eaten herself without a gard noticing the noise. The dead body had jagged marks of teeth bites, and on the wall there were hand prints spelling "to pay back a debt". This obviously isnt a normal case.

"So, any witnesses?" said George, looking around all the jail cells near by, as if he was asking sarcasticly.

"Surprisingly, the same time this happend the power went out for atleast 2 hours." Said the gaurd, correcting his sarcastic aditude.

"This is odd, usualy there would be some sort of weapon involved in order to murder someone, or atleast a track of finger prints." Said David, expecting the body.

"obviosly a case of suicide, gone a bit too far as to eating herself, i dont know." said goerge looking around the blood filled room.

"not quite" David said in reflex, used to Goerge being a bit too simplistic into these cases. "Look at the way the body is positioned, the body is facing down, in order for that to happen she obviously wasnt expecting the attack"

Goerge wasnt conviced and the excuse David had given him was a poor one. "Though the body could have just fallen foward after the attack, who knows, maybe one of the gaurds moved the body!" Goerge watches David lift the womans shirt up.

"By any chance.." Goerge and the gaurds looked at him, then the body. "Can any of you guys bite your backs?" he lifted the shirt up intirely (no not a sex scene) and there was a huge bite scar on her back. They opened their mouths wide, they were stunned and shocked by the incident. "This person is obviously either 1 insane or 2..." Points at the blood writing on the wall. "Needed something that she had given to her, though i doubt she would have anything here, so he must be out looking for more to kill untill... he gets what he wants."

Goerge screams "well, dont just stand there, look for this guy, he has been out for a while now, the body is cold, and the murder must have taken place at the time the power went out, exactly.

To be continued (more comming up, trillagy almost ending ;D)

LOgan
07-22-2005, 02:46 AM
You shouldn't make a new topic for each installment

Yokai
07-22-2005, 02:51 AM
ha, my bad, ill post the third one here then ^^

Hastings
07-22-2005, 02:35 PM
Topics merged :)

Yokai
07-22-2005, 03:35 PM
Thanks ;D

Yokai
07-23-2005, 05:05 AM
"knowing that you guys are pretty good investigators, do you think you could lead us around the town, looking for this "insane" person." said the gaurd, before they walked off.
"Great, just what i wanted." Said david looking over to the dead body. They had moved out of the cell now and were about to move to the door. Tiny bits of skin were found on the door.
"I have a feeling what we will find is at the condo." Said George, this time on the same track with David. Something was strange, and David didnt know what to think about. "How about we go looking for him tomarrow?"
"Sir, uh, that wouldnt be a great idea. If this guy is right-" The gaurd pointed at David as if he didnt knew his name. Oh, right, David was a detective ever since he was a teen, and he always loved fantasy detective books, like Sherlock hommes. (spell check again)
"We wont have any chance finding this guy today, it would just be wasting out time." said David. Swinging his right arm around his sholder while his lift was holding onto the shoulder. It cracked, then he thought of the man, dead on the floor, the pain he must have gone threw. "We would be wasting our time looking for him now, its dark, and if he is as smart as I think he is.." He swings his head back and foward untill it cracks. "We will not stand a chance." His bone cracks, and he feels like this is his last sight of what he thinks is real.

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"Sir, its the police department, calling to request you to head down to the station!" The man on the phone said with the common stareotypical soilder voice you would expect to hear from an army man.
"Jesus, its 4am, dont you guys have any patience!" his voice grew louder. "Ill be there in a second and it better be good!"
"Wait sir!!! dont hang up. Its abou--" the phone turned dead. then after about 5 minuites of saying hello into the phone, david got sound again. "Whats going on over there?! jesus, this isnt funny you know!"
Crunches, thats all you could hear, as if a dog bit through a bone. Water was heard on the phone, dripping, with also some heavy breathing.
He hangs up the phone and picks it up again dialing a new number, Goerges.
"Yeah, hi, i think its about time to head back into the station." he explains what happened.

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They both had cults, with 2 extra clips. They were outside the police department. the sun was slowly rising and the power had gone out once more. Things seemed grim.
"Alright, we burst through the door in." Goerge says.
" 5, 4 ,3, 3, 2, 1" Goerge counted, staggering on each letter.
"Go!" they synchronised in harmony. They burst threw the doors, though they just kinda fell over. The bodies were stacked all around the place.
"Whatever is here, its definatly not human..." He looks around and walks to a dead body holding an M4. He takes the M16 and checks the bullets. "Yup, definatly a struggle taking out this one, 13 of the bullets have been shot. And these guys were trained to shoot. Definatly not human at all... Well, we better look around for surviv-"
The hand that he had ripped the M16 out of was moving. "eh?! i guess we found one" The body's torso was riding, he pulled the leg over to his mouth. Then he noticed, there was no warmth on his hand. He bites into his leg. "ahh shoot him shoot him" George aims at the zombie, his gun was shaking like crazy but he somehow managed to hit him in the neck and the body fell over. The rest of the bodies rised.
"Run" they screamed in perfect tone, together.
They run and the zombies slowly walk after them. David looks over to George while runing. "We gotta find some one who is alive!" A hand touches his ankle again. "Oh **** not this 'gain!" He gets pulled into vent the hand came out of. They look at eachother. "Goerge, get in here before the zombies find out where we are!"
Goerge stares at the vent for a second with his eyes half closed "Zombies, this is turning into one riot of a day... and now im crawling into a vent.... how could this day be any weirder...." he goes into.

"so your still alive i trust..." said david, freaked out of his mind at the moment.
"What do you think?" he said...
"I dont even know what to think anymore" he says into a joke, though it was almost true.
"we have set up a little camp site in these vents... only place zombies dont check...

George calms down and asks... "do you have a light?"
"Not yet, but im sure someone there will have one, plus, we are in a vent, wait till we get close to the outside vents"

David was releived to hear the words "outside" being mentioned. but with these dead that walk stay in this world any longer, that means that soon we will all be a bunch of brainless zombies. "...slowly flatening the wrinkles.." They both look at him and ask "what?!" He didnt answer.

They get to the camp area, conveniantly located by a vent leading outside.

"Should we Stack to the top?" Suggested one of the men,
"No" Said a young man, who had the vent map."There should be a exit around.... Here." he points near the door was once, it was the part of teh vent that slided over on the corner.
Hm... we should be safe here for a while, lets get some rest...
"wait, what about that vent above us, you dont think that...."the young man stoped and was answer with
"your going crazy, if a zombie fell from that hight, he would surely be destroyed!"
"What about behind us?"

There were a bunch of fans blowing up "if he went into those he would be as good as dead, besides, we can always retract this ladder!" He pulled the ladder away from the other side of teh vent. we crowled on it in order to get out of that area.

"someone should still keep watch, knowing these zombies and what they have done, they seem quite, intelligent" David said

"fine, then you get to keep gaurd...." he gave david a gun and went into the small little tent.

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Quite, dark, alone, thats what i felt this night.
Thadunk
"what was that noise?! who is out there?" creeks and wrattles came from the camp, moaning, heavy breathing. I ran, i took 5 years of food with me and ran. Took the ladder, climbed up the area and retracted it back up. he felt as if, as if there was no way they could get him no.. breathing, rocking back and fourth as he heard the screams of george and the rest of them all...

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4 years later...

"They can fall from the heavens and back into their bodies, to seak revenge on those who made their lives horrible, But they go out of controll" David whispers while screaming at the same time, going crazy. "They apear from where they had onced dies, wondering the nights for the flesh and organs of those who live. They wont stop, untill they flatten all the wrinkles on the brain, and make them brainless oafs!"

The lights go out...

"and its about your time David.."

Lights turn on and he screams, 3 zomnbies cornered him in the vent. he dies, and the world is yet to be saved from thos who were once dead...

Hope you liked this installment guys, its over..

xxxrobxxx
07-24-2005, 06:46 AM
err... you should check your grammar...
and euh, the ending sucked :(

Yokai
07-24-2005, 01:26 PM
Originally posted by xxxrobxxx@Jul 24 2005, 02:46 PM
err... you should check your grammar...
and euh, the ending sucked :(
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Haha, check the post count.

For me it says 9 am. Want me to edit it sometime?

anyway, yeah, i just sorta ended it. :(

you know, if it were school work i would try harder but hell... i was just plain bored when i made this :)

OkeiDo
07-24-2005, 02:27 PM
They had a tent in the vent? =S

Lol i like the ending =D

Yokai
07-24-2005, 02:28 PM
Originally posted by OkeiDo@Jul 24 2005, 10:27 PM
They had a tent in the vent? =S

Lol i like the ending =D
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spoof on Vent "camping"

OkeiDo
07-24-2005, 02:46 PM
Hehe i thought this was a serious story, maybe it was but you were to lazy for a good ending.


Everything was normal then suddenly "i got food for 5 years and went into the vent, 4 years later" haha =D

Yokai
07-25-2005, 07:48 PM
Originally posted by OkeiDo@Jul 24 2005, 10:46 PM
Hehe i thought this was a serious story, maybe it was but you were to lazy for a good ending.


Everything was normal then suddenly "i got food for 5 years and went into the vent, 4 years later" haha =D
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on purpose ;D

yeah, i can create an alternate one later...

Kinda like that book Brian or whatever it was called